Monday, September 19, 2011
Sunday, September 18, 2011
urban design framework
group
work
3
– empire to barry hertzog
a
lack of captions with accompany the images and when maps are used, a legend is
not complete. what is residual
space? institutions on site page is very
helpful and well done. on the
photographic storyboard, what constitutes left and right images? north is always facing the top of the
page. the graphic shows a – b as an
east-west or west-east corridor, in future use north and south of empire. left and right are confusing and lack
precision. pedestrian perspectives page
is difficult to decipher. so is the
other perspectives page. why not simply
use images to portray precisely what the different views are? where are the sections + elevations
taken? what are the structures and
streets/roads? what is it exactly that
we are looking at and why? highway
interchange image shows no congestion and the image chosen shows the onramp the
m1 south. the historical development
page is very thin. what exactly is it
meant to be showing? architecture and
programmes? heritage sites and
landmarks? too many different fonts +
font size on the conclusion page. why? this makes the info difficult to read. overall the document lacks structure and
coherency, but has wonderful graphic and image moments.
5/10
2
-- empire rd / kingsway - barry hertzog to main rd
base
map would have been enhanced with road names, building or area location to help
orientate. as much as the our perception
of the site page is welcome, empirical research requires more distinguished
observations than the authors, unless one is seen as a qualified artist. base plan could and should have been stronger
incorporating bunting campus, sabc precinct, sentech tower to fuller grasp the
complexity of the site. a very good document
with a somewhat thin conclusion [why?] with an improved graphic morphological
acuity. sections would have enhanced the
project, providing another much-required layer.
6.7/10
1
– from main to portland – a journey through empire
a good and thorough document
with lots of potential but incomplete. base map should have incorporated
westdene dam and the green space around it, which has huge potential and is a
great resource but unfortunately was not utilized but the group. why the repetition of images and
graphics? the project suffers from an
overall coherency and narrative. load
amounts of work seem have to been done without an all-encompassing point. the introduction succinctly states: understanding an area is a critical part
of urban design. one must know the context of their given site before anything
can happen. analysis and mapping become highly important as they give insight
into the social, economical and physical characteristics that will help
determine the future and direction of the site. but then the analysis and
mapping are done in a nonlinear manner, which confuses the structure of the
document.
what
about conclusion and reference page? the
document is incomplete with wonderful use of graphics, which have come a long
way.
5.5/10
general
comments. captions are required for
images and graphics. images or graphics
should not pixelate. font should be
consistent. if drawings have no legend,
then the drawing should contain all the text as a layer to make it
legible. the use of plans, sections and
elevations is imperative and documents cannot do without them.
no
name
no
contents page.
not
sure what the project is.
spelling
and grammatical errors.
2/10
nabeelah
bagus
very
clear goals and objectives. what will happen at the potential sites for
development? what kind of
development? this has to be explored
spatially. parts of the analysis were
covered in the initial project phase by group work. why the repetition? get into the project and start designing in
the areas you have identified.
3/10
saffiya
daya
no
contents page.
clear
vision and objectives. demonstrate this
in your framework and area of intervention as you have done in illustrating
your objectives – graphically. use
sections. the drawing on page 8 is an
excellent start, but you need to layer it for the drawing to communicate the
objectives and it also should show how it engages with the other side of the
street.
3.9/10
nomcebo
dlamini
transport
orientated development
contents
page needs re-structuring. where is page
3, the study area? on the what is
transit orientated development , page 4 + 5, needs to be further explored and
explained with more systemic articulation, diagrams and more in-depth academic
explanation. photographs used here do
not add value to expressing what tods are, instead somewhat confuse. there is plenty of literature which explains
tods, find it and use it as precedent.
your framework hangs on this.
vision and objectives page 6. the
contents page it is vision and objectives, on page 6 it’s the other way
round. choose 1 and stick with it. be consistent. why is the vision a larger font? movement + precedent pages are not
clear. on the proposed development, what
is the graphic demonstrating? what are the
orange, red, purple and yellow structures?
be
consistent with font size and reference.
3.8/10
nondumiso
khumalo
reconnecting
johannesburgs to johannesburg
project
needs to be move from being 1 dimensional diagrams to being 3 dimensional space
in the spaces of intervention segments.
some of these diagrams need articulation in the 3rd dimension
and sections need to be employed and an overall structure with structuring
plans.
3.8/10
taariq
ismail
promote
an outdoor experience
excellent
mapping and now you must take this:
seek to cull the preconceived notion attached to sidewalks and transform
them into “sustainable environments that enable individual creativity to thrive
and contribute to community development, identity, cohesion and efficiency done
through the physical environment” (hand-out 04_project 4, 2011);
create unique, safe and comfortable environments and experiences when
traversing the spine through any forms of transportation (motorised, bicycle or
foot);
integrate the buildings and usages along the spine onto the street;
develop an environment that enhances quality of life to encourage a
greater usage of the spine;
and
make it into space, whilst maintaining your theme and adding a 3rd
dimension.
4.3/10
a
lack of a contents page makes the project difficult to navigate. the 3 sites have to be articulated in plan to
explicitly demonstrate where they are in space.
it is not sufficient to use images and not state where they are
photographed. later in the documented
this is demonstrated using plans. what
do the graphics and images accompanying the plans mean? project lacks clarity and structure and feels
incomplete.
3.5/10
sello
mphafudi
contents
page? problem statement is too
thin. site needs a legend. articulate academically the conceptual
framework. content at concept at
metropolitan scale and beyond is good, but be wary of pixelated graphics, these
are not acceptable. document possesses
some wonderful moments, but it needs to be stitched together to work as a whole
and to have a linear consistent narrative.
principle [principal]framework not existing
far
too many spell errors in the document.
3.9/10
atiyyah
saloojee
contents
page? font should be arial. project is
somewhat too schematic to give back constructive feedback. buildings have heights and on page 4 + 5, this
should also be demonstrated using all 3 axis.
use the objectives set out on page 2 to guide the project. page 1 is a pleasure and an inspiration read. this should be the essence of the
project. turn these into space.
3/10
tokelo
seturumane
expand
the introduction. articulate, using
text, the problem statement. site
graphic shows roads, streets, movement routes and not necessarily “the site in
context.” site tends to have boundaries,
define these. define the open space
systems, as in, what is private open space, public open and residual space –
especially residual space. layer the
drawing with orienteering or orientating text such as empire, jan smuts, gas
works etc. articulate concept from
claredon to portland. page 10 – what
does the title mean? be clear with the
use of precedents and choose appropriate precedent. how do the tourist coming from the garden
court hotel get to the market area because currently empire is hostile and acts
as a divider between the north and south sides of the road? how is your project dealing with issues of
densification or intensification, employment opportunities and other issues
highlighted in the handout? project
needs clarity and articulation.
3.5/10
ingrid
sott
in your introduction to your
framework, you talk about types of roads, what are the others? graphically demonstrate this: a
major portion of the site (yellow) offers very little pedestrian experience:
lack of street furniture, inactive edge and building frontages, with plans,
sections and elevations. precedent has
to be articulated further and state why the choice. concepts pages are confusing. in traffic flows page, articulate pedestrian
concentration, as in time, day etc. when
you have images showing proposed, also show current situation. explain the hierarchy of nodes page. the document is somewhat difficult to follow,
with parts of it pointing the reader elsewhere.
it needs to be much crisper, complete and clearer. a good beginning but it is time to focus.
4/10
incomplete contents page. elaborate on the theme, problem statement,
vision and concepts. documents require
clarity and consistency with a proper structure. these principles
1. to allow for more space on the
pavements so that pedestrians are able to move with ease (livability)
2. to
create a bicycle lane so students are able to ride their bicycles to school
(livability)
3. to promote better access to the bus rapid transit system and
other public transport systems along the site (accessibility)
4. consider more
public furniture, such as benches at the bus stops, shelters for the bus stops
and lighting to enhance safety (safety ) 5. mixed-use buildings with uses such
as residential, commercial, public amenities and parking (densification).
6. to
enhance porosity along the spine which will enhance vibrancy (vibrancy).
have
to expressed implicitly using plans, sections and elevations. the beauty of the graphics is undermined by a
lack of structure and coherency. be
systemic and thorough in the narrative, but most of all, the narrative has to
be linear and concise. explore space
through sections in your proposed densities and be consistent with colour.
3.5/10
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