people places
things:
well written paper illustrating a
burning desire to get to the bottom of the page and conclude. in future, try to push the work as far as you
can. do not settle for mediocrity.
angels &
demons:
excellent cover page (remember the font is arial) paper displays a legible
structure, which unfortunately omits a conclusion. why?
clever use of imagery.
the godfather part
3: paper
hits and weaves all the correct terms in urban design, grain; diverse
ethnicities; eyes on the street, into a coherent narrative. it's a pity the images were not more
integrated into the story – they are too stand alone. conclusion is appreciated.
a hologram for the
king:
excellent cover, b also mindful of the font.
be conscientious and not resort to the programs default font. that being said, the paper is very strong
work, displays maturity, structure + a touch of poetry. beautiful imagery. overall, excellent work – make sure you
maintain + sustain he vigour throughout the semester.
dhobi ghat: cover page? conclusion? image
referencing? that being said, the paper
is well written. does a good job of rendering mumbai and gives the reader
texture using text. the bit about how film
questions the writer is priceless and the sentiment is welcome, just as the
schulz reference appreciated. in future,
mix text with images with . . .
slumdog
millionaire: work that is almost beyond criticism or
critique. work on formatting, spend some
time learning indesign, which would have completed the work. use of captioning
would have enhanced the paper. pity that
the illustrative arrows appear as an afterthought. to complement your academic journey, i
strongly advise you to learn a formatting program or a desktop publishing
application to give your finished work that professional edge.
colombiana: strong paper, which is well
written and has an acceptable academic rigour.
the use of images and captions to narrate the story is excellent. that
being said, the paper insinuates several, unsubstantiated propositions. one particular has to be dissected and begs
to be addressed – justify the statement the paper constructs that, cities shape the way in which each person
experiences and traverses through them.
the giver: just as colombiana, the giver
paper also assets a statement too scintillating to be left alone and
ignored. it proposes that, city life is a dream for those living in
marginalised or disenfranchised communities but rather a departure for those in
power – this needs explanation. that
being said, the paper is written with a mature lyrical prose, employing an
academic structure, yet omits images.
why? this is particularly
perplexing since the giver is very visual and parts of it were filmed right on
our beloved campus.
the great gatsby: a strong paper which would
have been enhanced with the marrying of images and text. why are the images orientated in that fashion? is there a significance to this? images captions are appreciated but could
have said more. where are these sourced
from? overall, strong paper that is
tarnished by grammatical errors + sloppy formatting. paper should have ended with a conclusion.
paint your wagons: an excellently written paper,
which interestingly, only describes the film, ending abruptly. are we missing something here?
elysium: cover image + body text images
could have been more prominent in the paper. be mindful of the font. paper directs the reader to figure, yet these
are noted – as in, where is figure 1 or 3?
images always need captions for enhanced access. a conclusion would have helped conclude the
paper. that being said, the paper is
well written, makes insightful observations, and is a pleasure to read. in future mix text + images into one single
and hopefully, coherent narrative.
walk of shame: a peculiar paper which entices one to want
to know more about meghan and her yellow dress.
the paper attempts to introduce a structure, but the structure it
introduces could have been better structured.
consider crisper formatting. have
body text, images which are then captioned.
the text and images in the paper do not quite gel. a mixture of font types on the 1st
page shows an element of looseness.
overall the paper is saying something worth listening too. the conclusion is appreciated and the final
image is an excellent poignant touch.
sherlock holmes: curios paper which states that
the time in the film is the 1980’s. this
is difficult to believe as the films displays a victorian texture and
aesthetic, with horses and the london bridge being constructed. paper suffers from incorrect referencing and
the narrative inexplicably ends.
spider man 2: a well written, well structure
text heavy paper.
already tomorrow
in hong kong:
alluring cover page with incorrect prescribed font type. another beautifully
written, well structured text heavy paper, which fails to capitalise on the
viscerality of the city it narrates. a
pity.
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