Oral Reflections

The following projects need additional work to bring them up to an acceptable standard.

§  Returning Jorissen Street back to the people:  enhancing access of Wits . . .

Check spelling on the cover page.  It is Jorissen Street and not the way it is spelt in the document.  Project suffers from major referencing + format issues.  It is difficult to follow the thread of thought and the themes unpacked.  What is the intervention exactly?  Some images are extremely difficult to make out what they are demonstrating.  Project is incomprehensible form page 12 onwards.  Needs major restructuring.

§  Jorissen Street comes to life

Projects needs better formatting to communicate the key ideas.  A suggestion is that text is use to introduce the chapters covered.  For example, Site location + Analysis – what is been uncovered here?  Some intro text will assist the reader understand.  Project employs different fonts and font sizes and lacks proper referencing + sourcing.  Restructure and reformat for a much more eloquent visual narrative, currently it is difficult to decipher what the key themes are and why.  Needs major restructuring.

§  The power of art on a street . . .

Reformat final concept master plan for better clarity.  Spatial plans need street names and other fixes to orientate the reader.  Do a spell check and citations.  Minor changes need to happen to bring the work to an acceptable level.

§  Investing in the public realm

Project needs better formatting and a re-think of the graphics used to communicate the vision of re-imagining, even though its states, “vision of the project in re-imaging urban condition.”  Is this really what it wants to state?  Sections need more work.  Minor changes need to happen to bring the work to an acceptable level.

§  Creating safe and performing spaces in places of Braamfontein

From conceptual frameworks, connection of the concepts, to application, project needs major restructuring.  Repetitive use of graphics isn’t sufficient to explain and demonstrate the intention.

§  Seeking spatial justice for the people of Jorissen Street

Reformat project for a consistent narrative.  Graphics and text should complement and enhance each other.  Minor changes need to happen to bring the work to an acceptable level.

§  Merging Multiple Identities

This project is still at a conceptual stage and is far from being complete.  It took on much more than it should have and unfortunately did not deliver.  Rethink concept and simplify the theme for a more manageable project.

Overall, projects need to have no grammatical errors and misspellings.  Images and graphics need to be referenced, even if done by the author to differentiate between sourced and created material.  Font and font size to be consistent.  Plans need text, as in street, building names etc. for better access and orientation.

Hand in:

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Reworked projects are to be handed in as an electronic submission on 21 November by noon.