imagining comments

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oxford street et al - use plans + a local street

oxford street cannot be the entire length of the spine

the precedent, are these streets stitched together?  demonstrate where the precedent would be applicable

quote + reference project in paris 

demonstrate where go vertical sections are taken from

sections are very rich that they deserve more articulation of the introduction of infrastructure -- think of having more pages exhibiting this

drawings are very beautiful but need another hue imposed on them like chickens, goats + otherness -- where fat men play with their garden hoses for example, with the introduction of colour for greater depth

the turf road slide, is that one way, cos we don't drive on the right hand side - demonstrate this on plan
vision needs to be seamless as one thing that is continuous + should be articulated on plan with all the layers imposed on it

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make the vision + strategies graphic, like densities etc
spaces for intervention feels like you are making a park, greening the landscape
if this is the case then go all the way to the inner city
what is the orange line?  articulate this with a legend
you draw the train tracks, how about a station where the road + the track intersect?  make this a tod node, which would service the industrial site and assist in kickstarting the park, mine dump area
where some structures - enable one to stand and look out of windows to see the gold dust clear - are introduced
too much detail on the south, how about the city? north?  include legends and tone down | remove the casino bit

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nodes drawing need a legend
what densities are you considering?  be explicit + demonstrate this thru sections and other means
density volumes need otherness like birds etc
builtform along the corridor needs legend + text
proposed sections are strong, but buildings need bolder articulation with interior activity etc, where yellow swallows fly down from the sun
each section needs its own page with its own narrative, textually
pedestrian route should be anchored, as in start + stop with discernible weights
read what makes st. mark's place a great place on
http://www.pps.org/great_public_spaces/one?public_place_id=634&type_id=28 
and also what alan b jacobs describes a great street
pockets of public space theme needs to be explicit
kudos for the volumetric drawings

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reference drawings
vision image is good but it has serious densities which are needed
we don't need the vision image, just show the carlton centre as a volume to complete the graphic
drawing needs colour
the urban agriculture theme should be the the entire spine
the green theme must also be explored in plan + section
project needs a plan to articulate all emcompassing narrative
increased mixed use is a pie in the sky, you'd never get those building heights . . .
building is too corporate, make structures south of the m2 a max of 5 storeys unless its a beacon like a viewing tower or something
are the agricultural beds a modular?  this should occupy the entire spine on the ground floor and roofscape

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maps always need a legend
restrict presentation to 2 columns as a format
fantastic oral narrative which needs to be illustrated with drawings and desire renderings -- use your own photographs then layer them with your personal script
sections need to be longer, showing more of the streetscape, proportion needs work
objectives need to be illustrated
zus project illustration has to adapted to south of johannesburg